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We live in a world of technology these days. While the internet brings with it clear advantages,the problems in terms of control and security of iinformation outweighs the advantages. To what extent do you agree?

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the internet
 globally. Technology has advanced so rapidly that almost every individual globally possesses a
handphone
a firearm that is held and fired with one hand
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, laptop, tab and iPad. With the installation of communication cables and towers in nook and crook, the world is interconnected by the
internet
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 now more than ever.
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The internet
 has become an important source of knowledge
worldwide but
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worldwide, but
 the widespread of
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 has
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 made it vulnerable to certain drawbacks.
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, online purchasing always presents a risk of identity theft by unknown person. The person affected will face great loss of money and privacy which is usually unrecoverable. The
internet
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 has
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 become a haven for freedom of speech. Social media sites
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 as Facebook, twitter and Instagram are
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 a convenient page for anybody to post any pictures, videos and opinions.
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 beneficial ones, there are
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 posts abundance
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on
 racism, violence and bullying. It is difficult to control the content of these postings as there a million of posts every minute.
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The internet
 is saturated with false information up to the point it is impossible to differentiate between right and wrong.
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has been
 prominently evident recently with the spread of
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 globally. There were loads of misinformation that created confusions and panic among the people. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
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the internet
 presents many
advantages but
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advantages, but
 the drawback
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 cannot be ignored. New policies and strict laws by the government should be drafted to lessen the negative impact of
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the internet
.

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