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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Modern advances in medical care have led to increasing the
life
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 span of
human kind
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
humankind
 in general, in my opinion the merits outweigh the
draw backs
the quality of being a hindrance
drawbacks
 of
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 phenomenon. The increase of
life
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 expectancy among individuals will result in a longer time available for those people to spend with their families and loved ones,
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 would help in
strengthing
becoming stronger
strengthening
 family ties with different generations,
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 in case any of their children or grandchildren fall in any sort of trouble or atrocity, it would be easier for them to get over it, since they would have the support of various members of their family.
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, grandparents usually have more spare free time to spend with their grandchildren,
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 to those offspring parents, since their time is mostly preoccupied by their work
life
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 and building their career,
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 those grand children would benefit from different sources of guidance, deterring them from committing any illegal or immoral activities that they could
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 perpetrate because of the neglect which they might feel from them,
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 if a longer
life
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 would be worthless without an enhancement in general
health
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 as well, because if someone’s
life
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, regardless of its longtivity, is not met with a general good
health
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 it would be a calamity rather than a blessing, because in
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 case the person would suffer the agaony of poor
health
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 as well as become a burden his family,
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 medical improvements in maintaining
health
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 is as vital as saving lives and both are of the same level of importance. To conclude, I restate my staunch
beliver
a supporter who accepts something as true
believer
believers
believe
 that the advantages prevail over the disadvantages, since family ties would be more severe which would be
extemely
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 from a social
prespectve
a way of regarding situations or topics etc.
perspective
prospective
 point of view in general.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • elderly population
  • health care systems
  • pension funds
  • extended family relationships
  • quality of life
  • aging population
  • economic growth
  • volunteer work
  • expertise
  • financial planning
  • retirement
  • age-related diseases
  • medical research
  • healthier lifestyles
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