Task 2 In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over the factors that caused the death of some rare faunas and floras.
This
essay is devoted to the underlying roots of the reason for
extinction
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the extinction
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of many
animals
and
plants
in many nations, followed by some far-reaching solutions for
this
severe problem. Without a shadow of a
doubt
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the insatiable greed of humans for commercial purposes is the main reason why many wild
animals
and
plants
are on the verge of extinction. Humans convert the land so they can create space for residential areas. To be more specific, in
Brazil
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Brazil,
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many forests have been chopped down so
the
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that
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investors can build and sell luxury apartments for privileged people.
Moreover
, a wealth of endangered
animals
are hunted by poachers in order to make fashionable items.
For example
, wild lions and leopards have been killed to make leather dresses and fur coats.
Hence
, the appetite for money leads various
animals
and
plants
to death. Regarding the efficient remedies to deal with
this
trouble, the government should apply strict rules to protect and reproduce florals and fauna.
This
practical act can prevent poachers and create a safe place for
animals
and
plants
so they can avoid extinction.
For instance
, Cuc Phuong
national park
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National Park
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is used to conserve exotic
animals
and
plants
like lions,
tigers
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and tigers
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and aged trees
such
as ironwood.
Thus
,
government
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the government
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plays a paramount
significant
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apply
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role
on
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protecting floras and faunas In conclusion, the desire for profits leads to the death of many
plants
and
animals
.
However
, with the help of the government,
this
problem can be solved effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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