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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Due to the advancement in the technology affected many sectors. Some people say that the local shops has been closed because of the shopping centre. In my opinion,
this
 is a negative development as it creates the problem for the local shop owner.
To begin
 with, one of the important reasons is that customer prefers to buy the items from shopping malls
instead
 of the local shops; it contains a number of options for a particular item.
For example
, if someone wants to buy the shoes,
then
 in shopping mall having number of brand shoes are available while
this
 thing is not possible in the local shops.
Moreover
, most of the items are in the local shops are from the international brand so, they are able to give a large discount on the each product. While
this
 thing is not possible for the local shops as they contain the traditional items and to provide a discount to the customer give them a lose.
Secondly
, the shopping centre owners
use
 the celebrity to promote their malls. As many people want to
use
this
 only because their favourite actors
use
 the items from that a particular mall, even they are having the latest facility to attract the customer. To exemplify
this
, Research shows that many people go to the shopping c
enter,
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 only because its appearance is attractive than the local shops. To provide latest facility the local shop owner is not possible having less budget available.
Furthermore
, having all the product available at one place which save the time.
As a result
, it stops the local shops, so no one will
use
 traditional items and at least the culture will lose and affect the belief as well in the future. In conclusion, While the local shops provide the information about the tradition and culture but, the shopping malls will close it create the loss of the culture and society’s belief in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • specialized products
  • homogenized
  • local economy
  • circulating
  • variety
  • convenient
  • social hubs
  • infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • energy consumption
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