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Your local newspaper had an advertisement asking people to help with environmental projects in your area. Write a letter to the project manager to offer your help. Describe a local environmental issue Explain how you can help Suggest how to avoid the problem in future

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter in response to an advertisement campaign I saw
on
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 a local newspaper. It mentioned a need for people's assistance to improve environmental projects in the area.
This
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 ad caught my attention, as I was looking for some
answer
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with
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to
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 a problem that has been happening
over
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in
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 our
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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.
Firstly
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, I would like
to begin
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 by saying that, recently,
while
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 I was taking a walk
by
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 the
neighborhood
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, I overheard some people mentioning a serious
water
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 leakage
on
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at
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 the local
water
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 supply
reservatory
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. In short, I approached them to understand their complaints; it seems the leak is getting worse by the day and they fear
to be
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 left without
water
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 within the next few days.
Secondly
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, I
belive
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 that I'm able to assist resolve
this
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 issue. As a matter of fact, I own a company
especialized
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specialized
specialised
on
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 constructing containers to store liquids,
such
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 as
water
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.
Furthermore
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, I guess I'm able to make a new
water
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 container for our
neighborhood's
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 needs. The thing is, to build them I use a much
durable
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more durable
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 and light material,
thus
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 it will
last
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 a long time without showing problems again.
However
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, I need to get in contact with whoever is responsible to get on the specifics, would you be able to help me with that? Yours faithfully, Daniel.

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter could benefit from clear transitions and a smoother flow of ideas.
coherence cohesion
Single ideas are well-contained within paragraphs, but consider enhancing connectivity among them.
task achievement
The issue has been described and a solution offered, but elaborating more on the significance of the issue could enhance the response.
task achievement
Appropriate tone for a formal letter; ensure all details for offering help are clear and specific actions are outlined.
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