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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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It is true that some areas in the US avoid teenagers wandering outside at
night
,
otherwise
 they need to be with an
adult
. Personally, I completely agree with
this
 measure because of the benefits it brings.
First
 of all,
this
 measure of asking teenagers with an
adult
 at
night
 can protect their safety. As we may know, some cities in the US,
such
 as Seattle, are suffering from serious gun problems and gang violence. There are many terrible incidents every year that local residents are hurt badly in the crime scene at
night
. So avoiding teenagers outside alone can prevent them from accidentally running into those fights and getting hurt, and having an
adult
 can protect them in dangerous situations and make sure they can get home safely. Another point to be made is that having adults with teenagers at
night
 can regulate their behaviour. We all know that teenagers like having fun with their friends, and those parties sometimes evolve alcohol and drugs.
However
, it is widely agreed that alcohol and drugs can cause serious damager to young people’s mental and physical health.
For example
,
this
 year in the US, many kids died from consuming a fake drug that contains illegal and poisonous ingredients, and their families are almost destroyed by the lose of those lovely young kids. If there was an
adult
 with them when those kids pretended to be adults and tries those drugs,
this
 tragedy can surely be prevented.
Therefore
, I believe that the accompany of adults can stop young teenagers doing things that are not appropriate or even illegal at their ages. In conclusion, I completely agree with the action of having teenagers accompanied by an
adult
 at
night
 because it ensures their safety.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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