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In some countries, the number of people who visit art galleries is declining. What are the reasons for this? How can we solve this problem.

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Nowadays people are excited to visit a place which is known for its past
history
, art for that their visit to a museum. Some people say that these numbers is reduced. The essay will discuss reasons for why
this
 happens and steps to solve it.
To begin
 with, one of the important reasons is that it is available open only in the day hours, so if a person want information’s they have to reach that place at that time.
For instance
, Research conducted shows that to access that information a person must go to a particular place at the particular time that thing is no one likes.
Moreover
, most of the people attracted towards the western
culture
, so they lost their interest in the
culture
, even they were not aware about their tradition and their local language.
As a result
, the society will destroy and no one believes in each other.
On the other hand
, there are certain steps that the government should take to prevent the
history
 in today’s world.
Firstly
, if they represent the
history
 in the form of the movie so people can feel it and even understand it deeply.
This
 will create interest of all kinds of people from children to old.
For instance
, recently released movie becomes more popular, name of the movie is rani laxmibai.
Furthermore
, the government should start the campaign, which promotes the importance of tradition and
culture
. In
this
 way, they create an awareness among the people. In conclusion, while person interest in art is detrimental for the society and the
culture
 to prevent that the government should start an awareness program and represent a
history
 in a new way so it remains alive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital era
  • online galleries
  • allure
  • economic factors
  • cultural pursuits
  • societal interests
  • innovative
  • engaging exhibitions
  • virtual reality (VR) experiences
  • accessible
  • contemporary
  • promote
  • art education
  • awareness
  • foster
  • appreciation
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