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The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The graph shows the
number
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 of inquiries received by the tourist information office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. In January and February, the
number
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 of inquiries received by
telephone
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with
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the numbers
of
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900 and 800 respectively, are much higher than the inquiries received by
letter
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/
email
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 (600 and 700) and in person (780 and 420). As far as March is concerned, again
inquires
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 receives by
telephone
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 with the
number
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 of 1000 are higher than the
enquiries
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 received by
letter
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/
email
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 (700) and in person (800).
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, as compared to
previous
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the previous
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 two months,
this
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 time the
enquiries
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 received by
letter
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/
email
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 are
less
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fewer
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 than the
enquiries
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 received
by
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in
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 in-person. The same trend can be seen in April, May and June. The
enquiries
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 received
by
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in person, i.e., 1250, 1550 and 1900 respectively, are more than the
enquiries
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 received by
telephone
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 (1000, 1400 and 1900) and by
letter
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/
email
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 (580, 380 and 380).
Overall
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, there is an increased
number
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 of
enquiries
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by
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in-person and by
telephone
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 and there is a decline in the
number
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 of
enquiries
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 received by
letter
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/
email
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, telephone, letter, email, enquiries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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