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Some people say that we do not need printed newspaper anymore. To what extent do you agree or disagree ? State your opinion.

#people #newspaper
In
this
neoteric
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Neoteric
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notorious
 era, technology is flourishing at high pace increasing gradually and individuals are totally depending depend on automation. A group of army advocate that they do not require
print
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printing
 media these days
,
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,
 I
am partially agree
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partially agree
have partially agreed
 with
this
 given statement and
this
 essay will discuss the declarations in upcoming fragments, in the
last
 I will give my point of view. To start with, printed newspapers have many demerits in for
environment
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the environment
 and people’s life
.
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.
 The
first
 and foremost, in the manufacturing of
paper
 for
newspapers many
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newspapers, many
 trees are
knock
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knocked
 down, which increases the carbon rate and it will impact on natural word
.
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.
Second
 assertion, at present
time
 technology is rising gently and people can easily watch news through e-newspaper which reduce the extra charges for
paper
 media and it
this
 e-media
is
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are
 available in various languages and people can read
newspaper
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the newspaper
a newspaper
newspapers
 in their own native language.
Third
, online media is convenient an individual can easily take it anywhere anytime, it
do not require
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does not require
 enough effort. On the flip side
,
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,
 print ones have some merits on society.
First
, an individual can easily put record of a specific news for
long
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a long time
time
 while news on online media is
change
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changing
 according to
time
.
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.
Moreover
, in case of electronic media, everyone
any one
any person
anyone
 can write and post news on
internet and
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the internet, and
the internet and
this
 may
contains
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contain
 false or incorrect information some
time
 the news may be incorrect
.
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.
As an outcome, it will give wrong information to people
.
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.
 In
additionally
, web media
also
 effects on
individuals
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individual
individuals'
individual's
 health
.
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.
 For an epitome, if an individual reads online media for
long
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a long time
time
, it will effect on eyesight. In
conpendious
briefly giving the gist of something
compendious
,
paper
 media and e-newspaper plays an important role in
individuals life
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the individual's life
individual's life
an individual's life
individual life
 to know about
surroundings but
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the surroundings, but
the surroundings but
 various toxic gases are rising gradually in
environment
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an environment
the environment
 which impact on
natural world
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the natural world
 and in manufacturing of
paper
 huge number of
tress
a tall perennial woody plant having a main trunk and branches forming a distinct elevated crown; includes both gymnosperms and angiosperms
trees
 are cut down
.
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.
 Undoubtedly, according to my opinion, people should reduce the number of printed media so that the
knock down
(furniture) easily assembled and dismantled
knockdown
 amount of trees will decrease and trees will tackle various harmful gases.

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