The graph below shows the number of inquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six month period in 2011

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of questions

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a period of 6 months in 2011 by the tourist information office only in one city. It is clear from the graph that the

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of received massage increased in general

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had an almost similar pattern. In the first month in

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, there were 420 inquiries

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increased by 600

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of Feb,

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the

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decreased to reach 800 beforehand 900. After that, both increased gradually until Mar. The real growth was

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of the

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three

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rocketed up to reach 1600 and 1900 asking for the

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and in

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respectively. Meanwhile, the latter and email,

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, had a completely different pattern. the

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of people asking for information is 750 in Jan which after that dropped by a minor change in Feb and Mar. the

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of enquires sustained

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the same level in the

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two months before that there was a gradual decline from Mar to May.

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we could say that the lowest information given to tourist be

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in letter and email compared to the huge difference

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which is 1200 enquires difference.