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In modern society, some people argue that schools become unnecessary as student can study at home via the Internet. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, with the technology advancement and globalization, people think students can learn lessons through the Internet without attending school. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 partly agree with
this
 statement. It is important to know that students should attend physical schools
instead
 of virtual ones. In traditional education, teachers provide students with direct interaction, which helps them with self-improvement. By engaging face-to-face with teachers and their peers in traditional classroom-based class, students can discuss and exchange ideas effectively.
Moreover
, the class-based monitor students better, which can prevent them from having any distractions.
Additionally
, one drawback of e-learning is worth mentioning that e-learners are prone to being isolated and having less real interaction with their peers.
Nevertheless
, with technological development, student still can acquire knowledge from long distance. By a connection to the Internet, they can easily use their technological devices to search for relevant information and communicate with their teachers and classmates from afar.
In addition
, online education offers a lower price than traditional one because educational institutes have to pay for campus and facilities.
Furthermore
, with the Internet, students From all over the world can equally take part in the same school. In conclusion,
although
 distance learning provides some benefits for students, the traditional education
is
Suggestion
will be
 irreplaceable in the future.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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