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Is it harmful to buy too many toys ? buying children a lot of toys

#toys #children
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children
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Children
 recognise themselves, life and their environment through games. While playing games, their intelligence, memory, and emotions develop as they
communicates
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communicate
 with the people around them. The easiest way for children to organize games is with toys. Nowadays, the quality and variety of toys has increased with the technological
development
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. Parents can buy a lot of toys for children to support their
development
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 and
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 to spare some time to themselves. Toys have an essential place in social, psychological, physical and mental
development
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. That’s why the choice and amount of
purchased
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purchase
purchasing
 toys are important for children.
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 buying children a lot of toys may affect
childrens’
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child
children
child’s
children’s
development
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 positively, it will
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 have some negative effects. It is a fact that
having many toys have
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had many toys
has many toys had
have many toys
having many toys have
 many advantages. The children can learn better social skills thanks to toys. Children who have less toys can learn to communicate with other children and adults easily. New interests can develop by socialization and exploring new areas. More attention and love can be shown towards reading, writing and art. Children's direct to these areas will
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 have an influence on creativity. They will be able to understand the importance of emotions and
communication
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communicate
 with creativity and art.
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,
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,
they learn
being
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to be
 patient, sharing, and determination.
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Nevertheless it
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Nevertheless, it
 is not a constant norm that a positive
situations
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situation
 always will produce good developments. Toys have many satisfactory effects, but more can sometimes be harmful.
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 toys have many positive effects, having a lot of them will cause many negative problems.
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 of all, research has revealed that too many toys can harm children. Having too many toys can reduce the standard quality of games. The fact that people have things more than they need causes them occur unable to use some skills.
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, the children who have more toys are prone to being less creative. When they are bored, they start playing with other toys
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 of trying to create new games.
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 can decrease creativity and even can lead to being unsocial
.
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Children can play with their toys
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 of spending time with family or their environment.
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, the loss of perception of reality can
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 be seen. In conclusion, toys are not just for
entertaintment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
. Knowing that there are many benefits as well as harms, and conscious restriction of buying toys for children will have a greater positive effect on the child's
development
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 in the long run than toys. To summarize, there's no problem that buying
toys children
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toys, children
, but the amount is quite significant.
Instead
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 of toys, alternative games and healthy communication with parents should be established.

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