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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The given chart illustrates the
illiteracy
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rate
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 between six
regions
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.
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, it
also
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 compares the education of
men
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 and
women
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 living in these
regions
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. The data is based on
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information taken in the year 2000. The chart shows that the developed countries have the lowest
illiteracy
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rate
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that
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which
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 is close to zero.
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,
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 South
Asia
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 has the highest
illiteracy
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rate
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. Arab states are the
second
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 highest in
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 regard. Sub-Saharan Africa is slightly
uneducated
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 than
Arab
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the Arab
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 States. Latin America and East
Asia
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 show less
illiteracy
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rate
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. Interestingly, in all the six
regions
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, when compared,
women
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 are more illiterate than
men
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. In Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab states and South
Asia
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 the
percentage
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 of uneducated
men
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are
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is
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 from 30
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percent
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per cent
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 to 40
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percent
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per cent
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.
On the other
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hand
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 the
percentage
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 of illiterate
women
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 is from 48 to 55.
Likewise
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, in East
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Asia
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,Asia
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 the number of illiterate
women
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are
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 higher than
men
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, i.e., 20 and 8 respectively. As far as Latin America is concerned, there is a slight difference between the number of illiterate
women
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 (10
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percent
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per cent
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) and
men
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 (11
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percent
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per cent
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).
Overall
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 the graph depicts that in all
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six
regions
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 the
percentage
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 of illiterate
women
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 is higher than the
percentage
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 of illiterate
men
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.
In addition
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, developed countries show the lowest
illiteracy
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rate
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 as compared to
other
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the other
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 five
regions
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rate, regions, men, women, asia, percentage, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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