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In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. what do you think the reasons for this and how can it be solved?

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People are suffering from
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 issues as main reason is that their living style changed than the past.
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 essay will discuss the causes, including having high
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 pressure and eating habits and to curb
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 apply the solutions, including maintaining
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life
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 balance and doing regular exercise.
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 with,
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 of the important reasons is that nowadays, a person is living an unhealthy
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 because of their jobs contains high responsibility leads to
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 for an overtime,
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 is not possible in the past.
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 will generate the mental and physical stress, even
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 cannot be able to give priority to their family
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.
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, to achieve
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’s desire in
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, start to
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 hard and they forget their responsibility towards their family, even not care about their selves
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, as they spend much time in their workplace, they start to eat the food which would not be considered as healthy,
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 as fast food.
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, responsibilities and eating habit are the main reason for the
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 problems.
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, there are some steps must be taken to reduce the
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 issues.
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, after understanding the responsibilities
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 should maintain
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 and
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 balance, spends some time with family, which gives them care and loves,
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 helps to deal with stress.
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, there are certain recreational activities are there like, regular exercise, which helps
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 to maintain body and solve the problem related to the obesity. At
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, to live decease free and happy
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one
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 can take steps by maintaining
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life
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 balance and doing regular exercise is possible to avoid. In conclusion, modern technology changed peoples living style in many nations. While it introduces some
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 problems because of the job pressure and eating habits, but solved by reducing, managing
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 and
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 equality and taking part in recreational activities.
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