The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The pie charts illustrate the portion of
energy
used by an Australian, and Add an article
the energy
consequences
Correct article usage
the consequences
resulted
in Wrong verb form
resulting
greenhouse
gas
emission
from the used Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
energy
. Overall
, an Australian household uses majority
of power in heating, and Add an article
the majority
a majority
energy
consumed in water heating produces the highest greenhouse
gases.
The uses of energy
in Australia can be categorized in
six different sections. Change preposition
into
While
energy
used in heating contributes the highest portion, at 42%, the energy
used in cooling remains at the lowest, at 2%. Similarly
, one
Add a hyphen
one-third
third
of energy
is utilized in water heating, which is the second
highest contributor. The combine
Replace the word
combined
energy
consumption in refrigeration, lighting,
and other appliances Remove the comma
apply
stand
at 26%.
The Correct subject-verb agreement
stands
greenhouse
gases are majorly produced by utilization
of Correct article usage
the utilization
energy
in water heating and other appliances, at 32% and 28% respectively. When heating and refrigeration emit the same amount of greenhouse
gas
, at 15%, the
lighting and cooling contribute only 11% to the total Correct article usage
apply
greenhouse
gas
emission.
Interestingly, the
cooling is the lowest in Correct article usage
apply
energy
utilization as well as
in the generation of greenhouse
gas
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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