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More and more people in developing countries are purchasing cars for the first time. What problems does this cause? What do you think are possible solutions

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A growing number of people in developing nations are buying their own vehicles for the
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 time. While
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 is a sign of affluence, it can have a negative impact on the environment. The main issue associated with the increasing numbers of vehicles is high levels of carbon dioxide emission. Since developing countries have significantly higher population than developed countries, when more people drive cars there the result is a harmful increase in wind pollution. Needless to say, there is a dramatic increase in the incidences of respiratory ailments.
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, the major cities in China are suffering from serious atmospheric contamination, and the WHO reported more than five thousand cases of Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome and 300 deaths in many nations in 2008. The majority of them were in China. Making public transport more reliable and cheaper is the most effective way to discourage the excessive use of private vehicles. Another long term solution to
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 predicament is to educate young people about the dangers of wind contamination by exhaust gases from automobiles. Children in schools could be taught about how to reduce the problem. They are
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 likely to teach their parents about the things they learned at school and adults will
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 be influenced by
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 initiative.
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, students in the Netherlands were taught about the consequences of driving their own car in a reckless manner, and now the number of drivers has declined.
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, the most preferable transport of Dutch people is bicycles and using public transport or car pooling is a common means to travel. In conclusion, a growing number of people are driving their own vehicles, and
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 is leading to severe air pollution. The most effective method to tackle
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 issue is to wake up young generations to the dangers of the poor air quality.

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