In many countries, there is a push to get as many young people going to university as possible. To what extent do you think this effort is a worthwhile one? Do you think some people can benefit from not going to university?

In many countries young people are
encouregde
inspired with confidence
encouraged
to go to universities. The countries make
effort
Suggestion
an effort
to have as many school
anf
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
college graduates to go to universities. There are definitely benefits of obtaining
university
degree
:
such
as, opportunities
ti
in the direction of
to
acquire a better paid employment
positions
Suggestion
position
, be more
independant
free from external control and constraint
independent
at work, through
obtaning
come into possession of
obtaining
managarial
of or relating to the function or responsibility or activity of management
managerial
positions.
Also
, having
university
Suggestion
a university degree
degree
sometimes assist in immigrating to over countries. It is hard to find
real benefits
Suggestion
the real benefits
of not going to
university
. Should there be some
benefint
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
of foregoing a
university
degree
, those benefits would be just temporary.
For example
, some young people would find it more beneficial for them to work full time
instead
of study.
This
would save them a large amount of money that they would
othervise
in other respects or ways
otherwise
spend
in
Suggestion
on
tuition. They would
also
have an opportunity to make and save money by working.
This
would benefit them short term. Most of
peope
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
expect some growth during their careers. Without a
university
degree
the job
potention
existing in possibility
potential
and highest pay will be reached in just
few years
Suggestion
a few years
. At that point, if a
person
still wants to advance his or her
careere she
Accept comma addition
career, she
career she
carrier she
or he would have to go to the
university
and obtain a
degree
. Another advantage of not
porsuing
following in order to overtake or capture or as accompaniment to such pursuit
pursuing
university
degree
is an opportunity to obtain
position
Suggestion
a position
which
allow
Suggestion
allows
to maintain
good work
Suggestion
a good work
-
live
Suggestion
life
balance
stress
Suggestion
stresses
free jobs. Those employment
positoins
the particular portion of space occupied by something
positions
are the ones not requiring the workers to be
perosnaly
as yourself
personally
responsible for the outcome of work they do, positions not requiring much academic knowledge, but mostly
repetative
repetitive and persistent
repetitive
tasks.
This
could be very beneficial for people who are not very ambitious and
whoes
of which person?
whose
goal in
live
Suggestion
life
is to be focused on their personal lives rather than on careers. Another example of people who can benefit from not going to
university
are the people with disabilities or with medical conditions which would not allow them to successfully graduate. In
this
case the most beneficial option for the would be a job not requiring a
university
degree
or a college
degree
. Few advantages of not going to
university
can be found.
However
, whether a
person
wold
past tense of "will"
would
benefit of it would depend on what
this
person
's life
curcamstances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
are and what
this
person
's career expectations are.
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