Many people believe that celebrities are having a negative impact on children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Some people think that the media coverage of the whole lifestyle of celebrities

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the wrong impact of juvenile's lives. I have firm justification to assent to the

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. It is because youngsters try to be as their favourite celebs or due to the famous people’s indecent behaviour. The

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reason is that young personalities accept celebrity as their role model. They usually follow the lifestyle of their favourite stars.

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of it, offsprings indulge in unfavourable activities

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as drinking, smoking, consumption of drugs.

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, prominent people at the moment are more being involved or even owning some charities to help children in need. Among the UK celebrities considered 'bad' and 'famous for nothing' were Canadian singer Justin Bieber since he was arrested on suspicion of drink driving and drag racing in January 2014. A huge number of film stars have been indulging in wrong things

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as crime, Casanova, and use of faux language. These factors put a negative effect on the minds of the young and undoubtedly make them think wrong about the life,

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to say, they tend to live in an

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of learning how to cope with issues in the real world. The severe problem young individuals could leave them to stay in a position of

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. A famous film star Macaulay Culkin ceased his career at the age of 14,

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his life was becoming worse due to the spending all his money on having fun like drinking and taking drugs. To conclude, it is undeniable that children follow the ways of living of their favourite celebs whether they are good human beings or devil. According to my perceptions, that person who all into fame could affect home the moral values, and to have high crime rates and moan young people.

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Many people believe that celebrities are having a negative impact on children. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Today, many people do not know their neighbors in large cities. What problems does this cause? What can be done about this?

Some people think that detailed criminal description on newspapers and TV programs has bad consequence, so this kind of information should be restricted on media. To what extent do you agree?

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