In many countries today, the average weight of children is increasing. What can be done to resolve the issue?

Nowadays, the issue of
obesity
among children in most of the countries is increasing at an alarming rate. Parents, schools and government should take
initiative
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the initiative
and necessary steps to overcome
this
issue.
Firstly
, schools should educate children about healthy eating. At
this
young
age children
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age, children
do not have much understanding between healthy and unhealthy diet. For
this
reason, it is important that at
this
early age, children get education in schools about what is good for their health.
For instance
, teachers should encourage children to bring healthy meals for their lunch and,
as a result
, children will develop a habit of consuming nutritious
food
with lesser chances of
obesity
.
Furthermore
, parents should take the responsibility to monitor about what their children consume on
daily basis
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a daily basis
. It is important for parents to get
involve
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involved
with them and educate them about the benefits of healthy
food
. The major reason for
obesity
is
consumption
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the consumption
of unnecessary
food
consumed by children between the meals
such
as
carbon
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carbonated
hydrated drinks.
Additionally
, it is important to consider that how much calories a child should intake in a day.
Mostly
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Most
parents prepare meals and tiffin for their children and as a consequence, it is easy for them to control the diet of children, which will help to tackle the problem of
obesity
.
Finally
, the government may be able to take steps to impose restrictions to sell unhealthy
food
items to minors. In young age, children are not aware of healthy options and may choose to consume unhealthy meals
such
as junk and processed
food
. To solve
this
problem, restaurants and cafรฉ should not sell convenient
food
to children unless accompanied by a guardian and
as a result
, it will reduce the intake of unnecessary
food
options. While I concede that it will not be beneficial for
food
industry, but it is important to consider the health of young generation. To conclude, when parents, schools and the government will take responsibility to educate, monitor and impose restrictions where necessary. It will result in controlling the issue of
obesity
amongst children.
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