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Some people believe that people who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than those who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that reading
books
 is a better way for
people
 to develop their imagination and
language
skills
, in comparison with watching
TV
. From my perspective,
although
 I partly agree with
this
 opinion, I would argue that
language
skills
 can be acquired more effectively by watching
TV
, and will give my reasons below. On the
one
 hand,
books
 apparently are better tools than
TV
 to enhance a person’s creativity. It is undeniable that words enable readers to visualize what they read, and there is no restriction to
such
 imaginative thinking.
For instance
, if two different individuals read the book “
One
thousand
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 and
one nights
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One Nights
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” simultaneously, it is possible for them to visualize two different images of Aladdin, who is the main character in
this
 story.
In contrast
, whether a million
of
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people
 watch the movie “Aladdin” on
TV
 together, the only Aladdin that they can think of afterwards will be the
one
 played by Mena Massoud.
This
 demonstrates that watching
TV
 is overcome by reading
books
 in
term
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 of the ability to stimulate
one
’s imagination.
On the other hand
, watching
TV
performs
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 a more important role in learning
language
skills
, compared to reading
books
.
This
 can be
further
 seen in the fact that
TV
 with sound effects has the capacity to help watchers sharpen their listening and speaking
skills
 efficiently, thereby improving their
language
 comprehension. Perhaps the best example of
this
 is Khanh Vy, who is
one
 of the most well-known teenagers in
Viet Nam
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 at the moment thanks to her linguistic ability. She is a dazzling polyglot and fluent in four languages, including English, Chinese, Japanese and Korean. In the
TV
 show “The IELTS workshop”
last
 year, she confessed that she spend about 5 hours
on
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watching movies in foreign languages without subtitles daily, and she believed that it is the best approach for
people
, especially the young ones, to learn new languages. In conclusion, it seems to me that
people
 should read
books
 in order to develop
imagination
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,
while
 it is better for them to watch
TV
 with the purpose of improving their
language
skills
due to
 the above-mentioned reasons.
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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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