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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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A growing number of tertiary students opt to
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Although
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 studying in a different country predisposes the students
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 linguistics and cultural differences
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 it
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 exposes them to life experiences. In my opinion
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 children are far better off having studied in a foreign land
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 despite the challenges that they may inevitably face. The greatest benefit of studying abroad is that students will be exposed to life experiences that will improve them
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This
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 would have been
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 impossible if they had studied only in their own countries
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 To elucidate
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 by being in a different country
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student
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students
the student
 will learn about self -reliance and a sense of independence which will encourage them to push themselves beyond the norm in difficult situations. To illustrate
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 a survey conducted by clinical psychologists reports that students who studied abroad are continually pushed out of their comfort zones into psychological states
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 and
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is made
 to adapt no mater what
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 These challenging experiences are the main advantage of studying abroad because they
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enhance
 personal growth
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 The main challenges that students face while studying overseas usually stem from cultural and linguistic differences
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In other words
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 students studying abroad may suffer from
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culture
 shock and problems associated with cultural adaptation. To exemplify, a research conducted by educational psychologist found out that students studying abroad are faced with communication problems
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 as not being understood
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 problems with food
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 attitude and culture which may start to irritate them
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Moreso
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More so
, they have a feeling of discontent
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 impatience
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 anger
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 sadness and a feeling of incompetence which may eventually lead to a psychological disorder
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Hence
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 these overwhelming challenges
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make
 studying abroad difficult. To sum up
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 studying abroad
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is becoming
has become
 increasingly common
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 While there are linguistic and cultural barriers, students are exposed to life experiences which will promote personal growth
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 Despite the challenges faced with studying abroad
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 I believe that the benefits of studying oversea
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outweigh
 the drawbacks
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