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Many working people get little or no exercise wither during the working days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do you think people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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A lot of working people have wellness issues due to doing little or no
exercise
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 in the their work days or free
time
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.
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 problem. I think, people cannot do
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 because of the several reasons,
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 as intensity of working, a laziness, and a bad weather conditions etc. In the recent years, many people have wellness problems,
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 as obesity due to slow
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life
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. While some people are working hard at their jobs, others even though they have
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capable of being changed
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 working hours in their jobs, they are too lazy to do daily
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 in their
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, they are increasingly getting fat, so that they have a many different health problems. One of my
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, he has many health problems currently due to slow
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time
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 and unhealthy lifestyle. He has not been doing
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 or any sports since 2007. Governments can encourage people to do that,
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 as they can build a sports centre in different areas in the cities.
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, they can arrange sports or
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time
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 period in public works and people tend to do sports because of that. As a person, we should be more determined about these activities and we have to avoid being lazy if we want to have healthy and happy
life
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. In conclusion, all around the world, obesity have been rapidly increasing because of the these reasons. We should be aware of
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 problem.
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time
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 going to be less and more unhealthy because of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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