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In many countries recently young single people have been living far from their parents, from the time they began studies or work and until they married. Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

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Nowadays, young people choose to live far from their families due to the benefits they can gain when they study or work outside their comfort zones. There are many arguments into
this
 trend whether it is good or bad. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views since I believe that there are always advantages as well as disadvantages. In terms of pros, people who don't live with their parents seem to have a better attitude towards
life
. Their choices to leave homes lead them to meet with difficulties earlier than others. As a
results
Suggestion
result
, they will have better experience dealing with problems in
life
 since they have overcome
such
 similar issues.
Moreover
, living by ourselves can build confidence and independence, especially for those whose parents are over-protective.
For example
, a person who live with their parents until they married is likely to have fewer skills and flexibilities when coping with different problems in his/her
life
.
On the other hand
, youngsters choose to live far from their parents because they want to have free space to do whatever they want. I believe that
this
 can lead to many issues. Parents will not have the ability to control their
offsprings'
Suggestion
offspring's
 behaviour and actions.
Therefore
, some people are using
this
 to do bad things without permissions from their parents.
In addition
, not everyone can live on his/her own at the early stage of
life
. Many people still need guidance and protections
from
Suggestion
for
 their parents because of their
disablities
the condition of being unable to perform as a consequence of physical or mental unfitness
disabilities
disability
 or mental-health problems. To sum up, I want to emphasis the importance of living far away from parents due to the advantages they can bring to us.
However
, we
also
 need to pay close attention to the disadvantages
this
 trend can cause.
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