Government should spend money to encourage the development of sport and art for school students, rather than supporting professional sports and art performance for general public. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, in
this
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contemporary world, sports and
arts
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the arts
make the bondings
more stronger
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stronger
among people of different countries than the previous time. But it is now still a controversial issue whether
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government
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the government
spend
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spends
money
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on the development of
sport
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and
art
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for
school
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students or the opposite (professional
sport
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or
art
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performance for general people) in that case. Personally, I partially agree with the former statement. In my opinion, I strongly believe
government
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expenditures must be
go
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going
on for both novice and experienced performer. In
this
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essay, I will discuss the issue with giving examples of two recent statistics data.
Firstly
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, it is always necessary to
stronly
with strength or in a strong manner
strongly
make up the
pipe-line
gossip spread by spoken communication
pipeline
for the bright future of the performers who would willingly lead a nation. It is only possible when an expenditure of the
government
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would go on for
school
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students
as
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at
that time is vital for learning
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
smoothly.
Moreover
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, young blood is always hungry for tanking any upcoming challenge easily.
For example
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, Australian
government
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spend
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spends
a large amount of
money
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(around 15%) from their budget to encourage the novice
art
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and
sprort
an active diversion requiring physical exertion and competition
sport
performer in a
school
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level.
However
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, these performers
now holds
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now hold
are now holding
have now held
for the vital places in a national Australian team. So, it is conclusively clear that a
well
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good
amount of
money
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must be spent to encourage the development of
art
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and
sport
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performer in a
school
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level.
Secondly
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, if the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
not spend
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doesn't spend
a handsome
money
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for the professional
art
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and
sport
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performers
then
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obviously they would not show their performances in a world class
tournaments
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tournament
because of the crisis of the
money
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.
Moreover
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, it is quite impossible to arrange all the things with private or self fundings.
As a result
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,
nation
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the nation
nations
would miss the glory to attend or win the prizes of
such
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type of tournaments.
For instance
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,
combodian national olympic team
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the Cambodian national Olympic team
combodian national Olympic team
Cambodian national Olympic team
Cambodian national olympic team
did not attend the
last
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olympic
of or relating to the Olympic Games
Olympic
tournament as the
government
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of
this
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country did not take their responsibility for
national crisis
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a national crisis
. As a consequence, they had missed the chance
for
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of
winning the prizes. So, it is
also
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the
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
of the
government
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to spend
money
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for the experienced performers. In conclusion,
although
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it is a
controvercial
marked by or capable of arousing controversy
controversial
issue whether
government
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spend their income for a long time, it would obviously wise for the
government
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to spend their
money
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for
school
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students as well as for general people to encourage the development of
sport
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and
art
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performers.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holistic development
  • physical health
  • creativity
  • teamwork skills
  • nurture young talents
  • excel
  • healthy lifestyle
  • cultural appreciation
  • extracurricular activities
  • socio-economic background
  • social inequality
  • profit-driven
  • allocated funds
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