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In the past, people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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Nowadays, most cities and villages have vital public utilities,
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 as electricity, water, and gas;
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, people can live almost everywhere.
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, in the past, there were several places where people could settle. So, rather than living far from people and searching for new opportunities, they used to gather together, making a small community and living together in a so-called small village. There were definitely some advantages.
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, people who lived in a place which is not populated, knew each other well.
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 meant that when someone needed help, could easily count on many people. In my opinion,
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 had led to strong relationships compared with todays modern relationships. It is clear that with the growing popularity of social media, people are less in contact with each other.
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, like any other issues, there were some drawbacks which made people leave small villages. I believe, people always have a great eagerness to search for new opportunities. To set an example, there are always going to be more job opportunities in big cities rather than small villages. Having a better job with higher salary means a better life in most cases. In conclusion, there were some reasons why people had to live in small villages in the past.
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, people could not live wherever they wanted, because resources like water were not available everywhere.
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, people had to overcome
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 problems together and they had stronger relationships compared with people living in modern cities.
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, lack of improved facilities was one of the main setbacks of living in a village.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sense of community
  • Bond
  • Close-knit
  • Tight-knit
  • Belonging
  • Familiarity
  • Security
  • Support system
  • Social connections
  • Look out for
  • Have someone's back
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