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You have recently moved to a different house. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter 　　1. explain why you have moved 　　2. describe the new house 　　3. invite your friend to come and visit

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Dear John, Hope you and your family are doing great. I have heard that you already have a new job. That must be the reason why I have not seen you lately. I would like to inform you that we have already moved to a new house in Oakville. We are now near the city business district, about 20 minutes by train. You already know that my husband, Edward, is always complaining about the long hours spent
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commuting from his work.
That is
 the reason why we had to move. Our new dwelling is now bigger
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that
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 what we have before. It consists of 4 bedrooms with two attached bathrooms and two separate bathrooms. It
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 has a dining room,
well-decorated
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 living area, and a big balcony with an amazing outside view. The pride of the house is its modern kitchen and bathroom with a beautiful marble tub.
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 area has all the facilities
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, jogging track, supermarkets, cinemas and it is very calm and
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 for a living. I would like to invite you to visit my new house with your family
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this
 coming weekend. I hope we can have fun and enjoy
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 each other. Look forward to hearing from you soon. Regards, Lindsay
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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