some believe that role of the parents is more important than school when teaching their children to recycle waste to preserve the Earth’s natural resources. to what extend do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that
parents
should be the ones who teach their children
the importance of recycling for the environment, while
others believe that it is the responsibility of the school. This
essay agrees with the notion that parents
should be the mentors of their kids
to teach them the right way to recycle waste
, As they have the most influence on the children
and can always supervise them to do better at reusing waste
.
Parents
are naturally the role models of their kids
, and they are likely to be more obedient towards their parents
than the teachers in school. the amount of time that children
have spent with their parents
has built up feelings of trust and safety. That is
why they often rely on their parents
' decisions when trying to do something. while
teachers would probably require more time to bond with their students. Therefore
, it is likely that the children
would learn how to recycle waste
appropriately from their parents
. For instance
, in Indonesia, many young kids
have their own recycle bin in their room to learn how to divide different trash in their home.
Another thing to consider is that,
the family especially the Remove the comma
apply
parents
are the only adults who can always monitor their kids
' behaviour. This
will make them the strongest candidate to be the teacher of their own children
, as they can easily correct any mistakes of their children
during the process of learning. Therefore
, children
could learn how to properly preserve the earth's natural resources by reusing their waste
. to illustrate this
, many parents
have their own rules about waste
in the house, for example
, all of the family members should reuse the plastic bags that the parents
have provided in the house.
In conclusion, it is more important to have parents
teach their kids
the right way to recycle waste
for the earth's preservation of natural resources rather than a school because they have the most influence and control over monitoring their children
all the time.Submitted by ethia.oktaviani on
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The essay responds well to the task prompt, arguing clearly that parents should teach their children how to recycle. However, some nuanced consideration of the opposing view, perhaps acknowledging the role schools can play and why parents might still be more effective, could strengthen the argument. This would better illustrate a balanced perspective.
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The essay has good organization with an introduction, main body, and conclusion. However, a clearer distinction between paragraphs would improve clarity. Use transitions to better connect ideas between paragraphs or to introduce new points.
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Few grammatical and structural issues were found, such as capitalizing the first word in sentences and minor inconsistent verb tenses. Also, be careful of sentence fragments and punctuations; revising these would improve readability and coherence.
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The essay presents clear and comprehensive ideas in support of the argument. The points are detailed and illustrate a good understanding of the topic.
positive
Specific examples from real life (e.g., from Indonesia) are used effectively to support the main points. This adds authenticity and depth to the argument.
positive
The introduction outlines the issue at hand and the conclusion neatly summarizes the writer's viewpoint. This provides a coherent structure to the essay.
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