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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

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The journey to
space
 are more costly to
acheive
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achieve, however
achieve however
however
,
Accept space
,
issues on earth needs more
focuse
the concentration of attention or energy on something
focus
forces
 in which the assignment needs to be
lessen
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lessened
.
This
 essay will discuss
on
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about
 the need of lowering the
jounery
the act of traveling from one place to another
journey
 to
space
.
Accept space
.
 I agreed that the fund need to be
reduce
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reduced
Firstly
, travelling to
space
 always consumed enough money and resource
.
Accept space
.
the
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The
 budget planned for
these mission
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this mission
these missions
 are always huge compare to others
..
Accept space
..
for
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For
 example
,
Accept space
,
 spending 1.2 million of dollars on
space
 in a year is more and far expensive compare to putting the road network into better shape. Half of
these
denotes a person or thing
this
 amount can put some of the infrastructure in
better way
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a better way
. From statistic, the amount of money spent on
space
 in a year
is
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has been
 always higher compared to other infrastructure.
This
space
 has
plethora disadvantage
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a plethora disadvantage
to
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in
 the country in terms of employment Though
,
Accept space
,
space
 travelling is
also
 very important considering some new technology that
have been put
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has been put
 together
..
Accept space
..
its
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It
Its
 has
help
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helped
 us to a certain level of maturity
also
 to build our network technology
.
Accept space
.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
 some of our
network
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networks
are build
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are built
 and kept in
space
 for better production
.
Accept space
.
How ever
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However
, more attention
need
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needs
 to be withdrawn from the journey to
space
 In conclusion, more fund should not be spent
on
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on space, while
space
 while abandoning the little infrastructure here on earth. Money spent on
space
 in a year can build better schools and
also
 better electricity in the country where unemployment can be cub. I
beleieve
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 paying more attention to the earth issues than
space
 will create more employment for the citizen
.
Accept space
.

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