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The line graph illustrates the amount of electricity consumption in two seasons in the English house. Overall, it is clear that in winter the
power
 usage is the maximum quantity,
conversely
, in summer electricity utilises the least amount according to the chart. In cold season, the volume of
power
 consumption starts from around 35000 units in
first
Suggestion
the first hour
hour
, which dramatically rise
untill
up to, before the time
until
third
Suggestion
the third hour
hour
, at exactly 40,000 units.
Next
, the
amount noticeably
Accept comma addition
amount, noticeably
 reduces at
9th
Suggestion
the 9th hour
hour
, and the figure is just over 30,000 units.
However
, the
quatity
how much there is or how many there are of something that you can quantify
quantity
 again climbs significantly
untill
up to, before the time
until
 21th
hour
, which is the highest point, at approximately 48,000 units.
Moreover
, in the end of the day
power
 consumption speedily reduces, and
stayes
a woman's close-fitting foundation garment
stays
stayed
 at 35,000 units. In summer, the quantity of
power
 usage is nearly 18,000 units on 1st
hour
, Which moderately increases until 13th
hour
. The account is exactly 20,000 units and there is an equal utilisation find in between (16-21) hours.
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