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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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The graph illustrates the acidity of the three kinds of food products which we can use and consume usually within 5 minutes: Fruit, Cane sugar and Honey. Overall, the highest measured PH level of the sweet foods
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has mostly recorded
 after 5 minutes when people put them into their mouth; those things are mostly induce tooth decay in just a moment. The strongest acidity of all the
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 had recorded after 5 minutes when they intake them,
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, following that point, the acidity of sugars and honey had declined. Indeed, the times when the acidities of each
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: Fruit and Cane sugar and Honey will become weak to make some carious after 20, 32 and 15 minutes respectively. Following
this
 graph, experts and dentists can predict that the corroded teeth are the results that have made by consuming sweets in just a moment.
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, for your dental health, do not ingest them in a usual basis and just be careful to use them in moderation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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