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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that computers play a significant part in our hectic days. But some people believe that its drawbacks outweigh benefits special for children. I completely agree with
this
 belief. In today's hectic world, computers are existed in all houses and very accessible to children. But children indulge in using
it especial
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it, especially
it especially
 for playing games or watching movies. If
this
 approach
continue
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continues
is continued
 prolonged, it will result
to
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in
 various side effects
such
 as weakness of
eyes
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the eyes
, overwhelming and decentralization. There is an ongoing research that
compare
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compares
 the degree of concentration on two groups of children and the results showed children with using
computer
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computers
the computer
 less than three hours a day are more careful than other with overtime working with computers.
Moreover
,
siting
(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)
sitting
 in front of
screen
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the screen
a screen
 and willing to eat will lead to increasing the obesity of kids.
In addition
, psychologist proved that working over three hours with
computer
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the computer
 make centralization in sleeping process. Parents always complain that their offspring are consisting in using
computer
 all twenty four hours of
day
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the day
. They believe that
computer
affect
produce
effect
 on their children's study. There are always keen to play the latest version of
computer
 game and it prepared a sense of competition between them in playing
game
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the game
games
a game
instead
 of in their lesson. Their exams results are under expect because of their indiscreet. They
pressed
Accept comma addition
pressed, this
this
 point with
educationalist
 and requested from them to aware the children about the side effects of using
computer
 too much. In conclusion, it seems to me that
although
computer
smooth
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smooths
 the ways of doing our
works but
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work, but
work but
 its disadvantages are more than advantages for children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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