Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that computers play a significant part in our hectic days. But some people believe that its drawbacks outweigh benefits special for children. I completely agree with

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belief. In today's hectic world, computers are existed in all houses and very accessible to children. But children indulge in using

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it, especially

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for playing games or watching movies. If

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approach

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continues

is continued

prolonged, it will result

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various side effects

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as weakness of

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the eyes

, overwhelming and decentralization. There is an ongoing research that

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compares

the degree of concentration on two groups of children and the results showed children with using

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computers

the computer

less than three hours a day are more careful than other with overtime working with computers.

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siting

(photography) the act of assuming a certain position (as for a photograph or portrait)

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in front of

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the screen

a screen

and willing to eat will lead to increasing the obesity of kids.

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, psychologist proved that working over three hours with

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computer

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the computer

make centralization in sleeping process. Parents always complain that their offspring are consisting in using

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all twenty four hours of

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the day

. They believe that

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affect

produce

effect

on their children's study. There are always keen to play the latest version of

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game and it prepared a sense of competition between them in playing

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the game

games

a game

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of in their lesson. Their exams results are under expect because of their indiscreet. They

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pressed, this

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point with

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and requested from them to aware the children about the side effects of using

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too much. In conclusion, it seems to me that

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computer

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smooth

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smooths

the ways of doing our

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work, but

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its disadvantages are more than advantages for children.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

266 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Screen time
Sedentary lifestyle
Physical inactivity
Cognitive development
Internet addiction
Cyberbullying
Inappropriate content
Digital literacy
Virtual learning environments
Parental controls
Moderation
Online safety
Tech-savvy
E-learning
Information technology
Eye strain
Social skills
Multitasking
Interactive education
Health repercussions

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Fully explain your ideas

Most countries aim to improve their standard of living through economic development, but many important social values can be lost as a result Do the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The line below shows how many students of a school in the UK chose to take part in four different sports between 2001 and 2011.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

Some People think that men museums should be enjoyable places to entertain Poople, while others belive that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion