University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Some
educationalist
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believe that the admission in tertiary care education should be equal for male and female students in all the subjects. I partially agree
to
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with
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opinion as
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should be the sole criteria for selection rather than gender. It is a commonly observed that female students are more hardworking and studious compared to their male
counterparts so
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counterparts, so
they score higher grades in exams.
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has lead to
increasing number
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an increasing number
of women getting admissions in universities and medical schools
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which leads to
discrepancy
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a discrepancy
discrepancies
in
ratio
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the ratio
between male and female pupils so few believe that they should be in equal number.
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,
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in few underdeveloped and developing
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world countries, males with lower grades are preferred over females with higher grade so a separate
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is established which has resulted in
imbalance
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an imbalance
in the system.
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creates frustration in females and when they are dropped out from the
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just because of gender.
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the other hand
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equal number of male and female students in every subject
creates
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create
an environment of competition between them so they will excel with better grades
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.
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,
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,
this
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equal gender distribution seems to be useful in practical life
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as few female bosses are not comfortable working with
male employee
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a male employee
male employees
.
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discrimination will be reduced with time. In my opinion, it is important to have equal men and women in tertiary care institutions
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on
all the subjects.
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will curb the incidence of a belief that few departments are male dominated or female which makes the entry of their counterparts in that field rather difficult. Agreeing to equal distribution
doesnt
does not
doesn't
mean that
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should be compromised. In conclusion, higher education should have equal distribution of men and women as both will work together in the improvement of society.
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