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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
There are so many different
language
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languages
 all over the world. When people need to know any other
country
, they are learning a foreign
language
 because it is very important for every
people
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person
. In my opinion, learning foreign
language
 is not only for travel or work in a foreign
country
, but
also
 for communication in general. There are several reasons why people
is often learn
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often learn
are often learning
have often learned
have often learnt
are often learned
are often learnt
 foreign
language
, and it always refers only to travel to the
country
 itself.
Firstly
, people intend to work
to
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for
in
with
 the
country
. Future carrier is very important, especially when people can work in another
country
, the salary Will be very high. That's why some people think it's important to learn foreign
language
.
Furthermore
, some people
have traveling
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have been travelling
have travelling
are travelling
have travelled
 to another
country
 as their hobby or study abroad. If they arrived
to
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in
 the
country
, they need to understand what the native says and culture learning.
Moreover
, some people
are
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also intend
are also intending
are also intended
also
 intend to live in another
country whether
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country, whether
 because they married
person
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a person
 from the
country
, or they have
famili
a social unit living together
family
 there. They need it to
sosialize
take part in social activities; interact with others
socialize
socialise
specialize
 to the society.
On the other hand
, there are some other reasons why people want to learn foreign
language
. Despite they live
at
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in
 their own
country
, foreign
language
 is still important to learn. There are many things around people that used foreign
language
such
 as
electronic manual handbook
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an electronic manual handbook
.
In addition
, they
also
 have guest from abroad who come to the house or
also
 favourite music and movies that used foreign
language
. Some people
also
 need
learn
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to learn
 foreign
language for
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language, for
 being a translator or a teacher. In
conclution
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, I strongly believe that learning foreign is very important for communication in general.
Eventhough
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Even though
 they are not going abroad, foreign
language
 can be found around them

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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