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21. Do you think having a pet is a good idea or not?

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Pets are considered as  human beings friends and have been playing an important role in their owners' daily lives since be
ginning.
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the beginning
Whether owning a
pet
 is the right decision or not, I personally believe, depends on individual's personal conditions. The essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of having a
pet
. 
To begin
 with, owning a suitable and lovely
pet
 will be a great decision to its
owner
.
Firstly
, it not only provides emotional comfort to its
ow
ner but
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owner, but
also
 helps its
owner
 stay healthy physically and mentally. Pets are excellent companions for the elderly who live alone. 
Secondly
, having pets for children will help them to nurture positive personal characters,
such
 as responsibility, sympathy, and so on.
Last
 but not the least, pets
also
 protect owners and their properties. Dogs for the blind not only will lead their owners' ways, but
also
 protect them from traffic accidents. 
However
, keeping a
pet
 is expensive and will bring financial burden to owners because owners will spend money on their pets' food, medical cover and insurance. Sometime, pets will cause allergic reactions to their owners or carry parasites and transmit them to their owners as well.
For example
, dog fur is a trigger for some pe
oples' a
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people's
sthma.  In conclusion, I would say that petting an animal is not merely advantageous for people for ab
ove reasons but r
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the above reasons, but
the above reasons but
ather is a noble cause to save animals by providing them shelters and food.
However
, sometimes they cause threats by causing physical attacks, triggering allergic diseases and transmitting parasites to
ow
ner a
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the owner
an owner
nd it is expensive to keep them.
Therefore
, I personally believe that whether owning a
pet
 benefit owners or not will depend on owners' various conditions.
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