Nowadays many mothers take care of the family and don’t go out to work. Some people believe they should be given salaries by the government. 🔸Do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, most of the moms are not going to work because they are looking after their family.
Although
many folks agree that they should be paid by the
government
I strongly believe that taking
care
of their own family should not be a burden to the state. Having a family can be difficult especially if the parents are working at the same time. One way or the other, there should be a time when both partners will decide who will stay
home
to take
care
of the family especially if they have children.
This
said, the moms usually stay
home
because they know better how to take
care
of their kids.
Therefore
, the
government
has nothing to do with the decisions the parents make for the family. And
also
it’s the responsibility of the mother to stay
home
and look after the kids to make sure they are safe and sound.
Furthermore
, If the
government
will pay for the salaries of each and every mother staying at
home
,
this
will be a big cut on the budget that needs to be funded for other needs of the people. And
instead
of helping the mothers
this
might cause a bad reputation as it can trigger laziness and early pregnancies.
For example
, a study shows that in the Philippines, teenage marriage is increasing because the
government
are supporting them in terms of giving cash aid,
as a result
,
instead
of studying in school most are getting married at a very young age because they know that the
government
will help them. In a nutshell, it is the mothers’ choice to take
care
of the family and I believe that the
government
do not need to pay them as it is their responsibility and it will create a bad image to others, especially to the young female students.
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