In order to be successful at a sport, some think you must be physically strong while others believe mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Everyone
want
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wants
to be successful, in some particular area. It could be job, researches or sometimes
sport
the occurrence of a sudden discharge (as of liquid)
spirt
. For the
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one there are always debates what is more important for good athlete- physical
strength
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, or mental
health
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. I believe, that both of them are
important but
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important, but
physical
strength
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is the key one. Mental
strength
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, of course, has a great influence on a life of every
sportsman
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.
Bad mental condition
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The bad mental condition
can affect on training schedule or
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
intensity.
Person
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A person
The person
who
can not
can not
cannot
concentrate on his training, or lose his faith after
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a number
the number
of fails,
cannot became
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cannot become
a successful
sportsman
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.
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, sometimes while tournament the best athletes lose because weak mental
health
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. At the same time, without
physically
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physical
strength
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it is quite hard to be a
sportsman
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at all. Despite there are exist a lot of Paralympic athletes, not all
kind
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kinds
of sports can be handled by them. The weak
health
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close almost all paths to the professional sport. Olympic
games
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games, for
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example show
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example, show
the best human kind’s possibilities, so there no place for weak bodies. I
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
should be said, that mental and physical
health
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extremely important for any
sportsman
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.
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, In my point of view body conditions play the biggest role in a life of every athlete.

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