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For centuries, important parts of education have remained such as reading, writing and maths. With the advent of computers, some people think that computer skill should be made as a fourth skill to be added to the list. To what extent do you agree.

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In
this
 modern era, with the development in technology, knowledge in
computer
education
 is crucial in people’s life. Many people believe that
computer
skill
 has been an essential
skill
 as a literature and logics. I totally agree that
computer
education
 should be made at
next
skill
 to be prioritized or even made mandatory to the curriculum. There are two primary reasons why
computer
skill
 should make compulsory in schools and colleges.
Firstly
,
Computer
skill
 makes us understand things or subjects better with much interest. To be more specific, educational software and applications help student understand the subjects like math, science and literature much better than before.
For example
, one of the researches done in Japan have shown that the children's interest in studies has increased by sixty percent by the use of computers.
Therefore
,
computer
skill
 can be taken as an important tool for developing children's interest in
education
.
Secondly
,
computer
education
 creates the job opportunity. There are a variety of careers that an individual can choose after studying or having knowledge in software, hardware, programming language, data analysis etc. People can work as a software engineer, data analyst or programmer. People can even become an entrepreneur.
Hence
 there are many job opportunity if someone has
computer
skill
.
Computer
skill
, not only help people in their study and work but
also
 makes their life easy and connect the people all around the world.
For instance
, social networking is being popular among people who have those skills, which help them to communicate with relatives and friends. They can even do many tasks
such
 as paying the electric bill, water bill, internet bill etc. To sum up, if the
computer
skill
 is made compulsory at school and colleges, people’s life would be much easier as it helps in study, work as well as in daily activities.

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