IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 6

Social media has many positive uses, but there have been some negative consequences to it as well. Identify a problem caused by social media and describe the solutions you would propose to address this problem.

#media #consequences #address
The social media have both positive and negative impacts, but it depends on the users and the way they are using it. The revolution of technology in the 20th century brought so many changes in
this
 world and one of the great innovations was the internet which opened the doors and created opportunities for all industries
hence
,
this
 initiative changed the way of communications and a lot of social media channels brought to the market. The newly established social media channels had a great impact on social life as well as strengthened the businesses by doing online marketing and reaching to the people around the globe by one click.
Besides
this
; the education systems around the world
also
 benefited from using social media. The above-mentioned benefits are not only limited to the organizations or business, but it
also
 has an excellent influence on our social life and one of the best advantages of the social media is the networking that brings people together from around the globe and they will have the opportunity to learn about the culture of other countries. The other hand, social media
also
 has a negative impact, especially on our daily life because these channels are an open-source for young generations and they can access any kind of materials without excess limitation to the sites with harming content.
For example
 and minor can create an account in all sorts of social media that in some case they cannot analyse the information and make wrong decisions.
Furthermore
, most of the people are busy with the social media channels and they spend most of their time there,
although
,
instead
 of that, they can read a book to
further
 improve their knowledge. In conclusion, social media have both positive and negative impact on our lives,
however
, the business can get the benefit of it by doing marketing activities and reaching people easily and the social lives have
also
 affected due to massive use of these channels.
Submitted by rashid.saadat90 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: