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Traditional medicine, such as acupuncture and herbal remedies, is very popular in some countries. Those who practise traditional medicine claim it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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The traditional
medicine
 is very famous in some countries because they believe that it is
effetive
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more effective
effective
 than the modern medicines for improving health. The idea of using traditional
medicine
 is not something new and it has been used for
serveral
(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many
several
 years around the world when there was
lack
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a lack
 of modern
medicine
. In the past people did not have facilities to make the modern
medicine but
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medicine, but
 by the passage of time the
this
 issue has been tackled and people can use standard
medicine
 so I am strongly
disagree
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disagreeing
 with the claim that the
tranditional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
medicine
 is better than the
moder
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
mother
 for health. There are countries around that world that have been using traditional
medicine
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medicinal
 massively and it
include
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includes
 most of the south
asian
a native or inhabitant of Asia
Asian
countries whether
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countries, whether
 the
tranditional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
transitional
 doctors without having medical experiences prescribe
different kind
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different kinds
a different kind
 of medicines to their patients
wihtout
in absence of
without
 diagnosing the diseases.
For example
, the report that I came across in 2018, a local TV channel broadcasted a report
about using of
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about using
 traditional medicines and there were a lot of
victimes
an unfortunate person who suffers from some adverse circumstance
victims
of
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by
 using
unappropriate
not suitable for a particular occasion etc
inappropriate
appropriate
 drugs which were prescribed by the traditional doctors. In conclusion, the
moder
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
medicine
 is the only
trustable
 source which should be used for any kind of illness by visiting professional doctors and the traditional not be used due to unknown side
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 to our body.
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