Traditional medicine, such as acupuncture and herbal remedies, is very popular in some countries. Those who practise traditional medicine claim it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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The traditional

medicine

is very famous in some countries because they believe that it is

effetive

Suggestion

more effective

effective

than the modern medicines for improving health. The idea of using traditional

medicine

is not something new and it has been used for

serveral

(used with count nouns) of an indefinite number more than 2 or 3 but not many

several

years around the world when there was

lack

Suggestion

a lack

of modern

medicine

. In the past people did not have facilities to make the modern

medicine but

Accept comma addition

medicine, but

by the passage of time the

this

issue has been tackled and people can use standard

medicine

so I am strongly

disagree

Suggestion

disagreeing

with the claim that the

tranditional

consisting of or derived from tradition

traditional

medicine

is better than the

moder

belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages

modern

mother

for health. There are countries around that world that have been using traditional

medicine

Suggestion

medicinal

massively and it

include

Suggestion

includes

most of the south

asian

a native or inhabitant of Asia

Asian

countries whether

Accept comma addition

countries, whether

the

tranditional

consisting of or derived from tradition

traditional

transitional

doctors without having medical experiences prescribe

different kind

Suggestion

different kinds

a different kind

of medicines to their patients

wihtout

in absence of

without

diagnosing the diseases.

For example

, the report that I came across in 2018, a local TV channel broadcasted a report

about using of

Suggestion

about using

traditional medicines and there were a lot of

victimes

an unfortunate person who suffers from some adverse circumstance

victims

Suggestion

using

unappropriate

not suitable for a particular occasion etc

inappropriate

appropriate

drugs which were prescribed by the traditional doctors. In conclusion, the

moder

belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages

modern

medicine

is the only

trustable

source which should be used for any kind of illness by visiting professional doctors and the traditional not be used due to unknown side

affects

property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business

effects

to our body.

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Traditional medicine, such as acupuncture and herbal remedies, is very popular in some countries. Those who practise traditional medicine claim it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people buy local food?

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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