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Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development. However, others think social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Economic development is one the most crucial measurement to evaluate the degree of social wellbeing in the society. In a long race, men have to pay the price of loss of social values in terms of achieving productive benefits In my opinion, the cons of commercial advancement outweigh its pros.
This
 essay will intend to analyse both its merits and demerits before drawing a reasonable conclusion. On the one hand, it is irrefutable that by the growth of the economy, people can upgrade their quality of
life
 in multifarious ways. It means that, all kinds of ordinary individuals have all sorts of the rudimentary facilities to enjoy the
life
. It would be worthwhile to cite an example regarding the USA, the poorest of the poor have all elementary amenities of
life
such
 as food, clothing, shelter.
Moreover
, all the citizens have enjoyed high levels of social welfare and they enjoy free medical care as well as educational facilities. Even in developing countries like India and China, the
life
 of people has enhanced as compared to the earlier times owing to the economic enlargements.
On the other hand
, in the quest of economic growth, social values have taken a back seat. There are multiple reasons for it.
First
 and foremost, people now have become greedy and selfish.
In other words
, they have become self centred since they have no time for each other.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
they have become workaholics. It means that they have failed to strike a balance between their work and
life
. As a consequence, family
life
 is suffering.
For instance
, in my country as the trend of economic standard of living has risen up, the divorce rates have
also
 gone up.
Thirdly
, the young generation has started to follow global culture.
Hence
, they have forgotten moral values and do not respect their elders. What is more, people resort to unethical means to keep up their economic
proeperties
status established in order of importance or urgency
priorities
properties
.
In other words
, competition has become unhealthy. Addition to
this
,
instead
 of
improve
Suggestion
improving
 their own product,
bussinesses
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
 try to defame the products of other companies.
For example
, someone has spread the nuisance
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
 regarding one flour company named Ashirwad, saying that the wheat flour contained the plastic. Later the company had to clarify through
TV commercial
Suggestion
TV commercials
 that substance was not
plastic but
Accept comma addition
plastic, but
gluten which
Accept comma addition
gluten, which
 is
natural constituent
Suggestion
a natural constituent
 of wheat flour.
Moreover
, the
collageues
an associate that one works with
colleagues
colleges
 are not co- operative as in
earlier time
Suggestion
earlier times
an earlier time
.
As a result
, the relationship of people
ik
 society is much worse than in the past. Money- oriented community is not
very pleasant place
Suggestion
a very pleasant place
 to live in. No wonder, in developed countries.
many
Suggestion
Many
 people are
downshifting
 or refusing promotion to give appropriate time to their family and society. Summing up, economic development offer a
variery
a collection containing a variety of sorts of things
variety
 of standard
level
Suggestion
levels
 of
life
 that people can enjoy, but there is a loss of social values which puts
big question mark
Suggestion
a big question mark
 on the advantages of economic growth. The onus is on the individual to strike a balance between work and leisure to occupy all significance of economic developments without loss of social values.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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