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In spite of the advances made in agricultural, many people still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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As we enter
in
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into
 the 21st century, the cutting-eggs technology has drastically affected the ways of farming. Despite of these changes, there are many individuals, who
are still suffering
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is still suffering
 from famine.
This
 essay will explore the causes of
this
 disturbing trend and
prapose
by chance
perhaps
propose
proposed
 some of
easible
capable of being done with means at hand and circumstances as they are
feasible
 solutions. To initiate, the main cause is that, more modern agricultural methods not reaching to the people, who need it the most. To illustrate, there is an uneven distribution of methods in all nations and
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 country has not enough financial resources to implement all leading-edge technologies.
Furthermore
, many countries have suitable fertilised soil to gain enough crop yield. But, more
occurances
an event that happens
occurrences
occurrence
 of natural disasters like flooding less
availabity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of
food
.
Additionally
, the climate
also play
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also plays
has also played
 a vital role in
famine
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the famine
. Some areas are not appropriate to use modern agriculture machineries. The solution that, I
believe would
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believe, would
 be most effective is rich nations should provide financial support to poor nations.
Hence
,
under developed
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
underdeveloped
 countries will utilise all advanced equipments and avoid the issue.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, with the use of genetic
engeenering
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
engineering
methods researchers
Accept comma addition
methods, researchers
 should develop genetic modified plants, that can easily withstand with inevitable natural harms.
Additionally
, the authority should put control on
high price
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the high price
 of
food
.
Hence
, everyone can manage to buy
food
. To infer, it is undeniable that because of rapid advancement in agricultural
reahm
beyond or deviating from the usual or expected
rum
realm
, which has both optimistic as well as pessimistic consequences.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
, at the global stage, a collaborate
efferts
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effort
efforts
 can be taken by authorities in order to
overtook
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overtake
 shortage of
food
.
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