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Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal of more money than people in other impòrtant professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that sports people deserve higher salaries than other professionals,
on the contrary
, many think
this
 is not fair. In
this
 essay both views will be approached and I will explain why I think there are other jobs that should be paid bigger wages. Those who support that sports professionals should earn more money claim, in the
first
 place, that they sacrifice their love and family life to grow professionally. Take,
for example
, the majority of football players do not have partners or families due to having to travel all the time. Another reason is that sports careers are short, maybe 20 years or less,
therefore
, high wages allow these professionals to save for the future when they will not able to play anymore.
On the other hand
, it is thought by many, that sports people should not have big wages. The
first
 reason is that there is no need to study to be good at playing games, meanwhile, physicians and lawyers,
for instance
, study for over 10 years to get licenced and ready to practice. The
second
 point is that sports are not essential for people's lives so money should not be wasted in these, but put into public services
such
 as education and health. In conclusion, while many fans agree that sport stars should earn more money than other professions, I think, there are careers, essentially those related to public services,
such
 as teaching and caring for the health which need to be encouraged and promoted by the government.
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