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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to make sure the supply of food is enough?

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One of the major concerns nowadays is that, if the agriculture sector can meet the requirement of the
food
 supply in the world. There are various factors are effecting
such
 as overpopulation, climate change, and no proper facilities provided to farmers. I will discuss some of the causes and a few methods to alleviate the problem.
Firstly
, due to the growing population that has been increasing drastically, farmers cannot
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs.
Also
, a lot of
food
 is being wasted because the current generation does not know the value of
food
 and money.
Secondly
, climate change
such
 as uncertain rainfalls during off reason that affects the yield
as a result
, all the
crop
Suggestion
crops
 spoiled and can't be consumed. It not only wastes time and
money but
Accept comma addition
money, but
also
 grains that have been cultivated.
Lastly
, farmers do not have modern technology equipment that requires less physical efforts and help them to produce efficiently.
Moreover
, they do not know about new technology so they
are stuck
Suggestion
stick
 with old school methods. For an instant, research done by the
food
 supply industry showed that 60% of farm owners still use cows to
plow
a powerful stroke with the fist or a weapon
blow
plough
Plough
 the farm whereas, modern machines could be used. Some steps could be taken to improve the supply of grains
such
 as children in school must be taught and given basic values of life
education
Accept comma addition
education, such
such
 as, the importance of
food
 and making them a habit of not wasting it.
Additionally
, the government should provide loan support to farmers by providing schemes to buy modern equipment at the 0 interest
rate which
Suggestion
rates, which
rates which
, will be beneficial got them to produce a large number of crops.
For example
, in developing countries
such
 as the United nation uses tractors to
yield whereas
Accept comma addition
yield, whereas
, in underprivileged areas they
use farm animals
Suggestion
use in farm animals
. In conclusion, some of the steps could be taken by the government and individuals to produce an efficient supply of
food
such
 as basic knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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