In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or a negative development?

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For the past few years, it
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observed that
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shopping has been diminishing as
customers
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opt for huge shopping
malls
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to buy new
stuffs
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stuff
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. In my opinion, I completely support
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as a positive trend. There are several reasons
people
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go to huge shopping centres or
mall
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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can find everything in
malls
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without much struggle. They can not only do shopping but
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various other things to do like having fun or meals. Quality is never criticized as there are branded shops. With quality comes durability and it is undeniable that
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those branded stuffs are being tested for
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their
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endurance. I remember, once I bought Gucci shoes long back, and I was  stunned
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its
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their
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durability as I am still wearing
the one
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them
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.
Also
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,
customers
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who bring their children or toddlers along
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many options as there is
play
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a play
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area for kids to have fun, and for toddlers, there is
baby
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a baby
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care room available in
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. Meanwhile,
customers
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can
also
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enjoy watching movies, shows or events in theatres once
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shopping. One more thing that attracts
customers
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to
malls
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is restaurants and
food
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court
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. It is
the
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  fact that
people
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travelling to
malls
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for shopping always end up with meals which ultimately leads
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gaining energy.
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, shopping in local
malls
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is not fruitful in terms of
food
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since one has to forge for
food
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which makes them lethargic.
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, as there are plenty of reasons like fun,
food
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, entertainment and many more, including  shopping in big
malls
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,
people
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are
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bound
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to travel to giant shopping centres as compared to local shops, and
this
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is the reason for the closure of small shops in locals.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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