One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, the world is more and more developed,

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the medical care is

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improved so people are living longer and

life

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expectancy

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is increasing. I believe that it brings more advantages than disadvantages.

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, the conditions of living are improving, especially medical care, people

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goes

to the hospital to check their health regularly, they can detect and cure dangerous disease sooner.

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, people's lifetime is longer.

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, if someone finds out they have early-stage cancer, they will be treated early and sustain

life

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. The focus on food choices

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increased, people will know which foods are clean, what foods are healthy.

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, the increase in

life

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expectancy

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will help many professionals, teachers, researcher or doctors

to devote

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more to the country.

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, one thing to worry about that

life

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expectancy

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is increasing means the retiring age will later. Young people after graduated can not find a job because

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advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)

older

people are in

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position with more experience. So that the government needs to spend much money to support young people and create more jobs to keep an unemployment rate not increase. But thanks to that, there will be many generations in a family living together. Descendants will live with grandparents, they will learn about many things related to history and tradition. In conclusion, the advantages of increased

life

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expectancy

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outweigh the disadvantages,

Life

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is precious and the government should spend more money on medical care in any way possible. All of us want to live longer and contribute to our family and country for as long as possible.

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One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

Recently some people can work from home using modern technology. some say this only benefits the workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many customs and traditional ways of behavior are no longer relevant to modern life and not worth keeping. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.