One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, the world is more and more developed,
hence
the medical care is
also
improved so people are living longer and
life
expectancy
is increasing. I believe that it brings more advantages than disadvantages.
Firstly
, the conditions of living are improving, especially medical care, people
go
Suggestion
goes
to the hospital to check their health regularly, they can detect and cure dangerous disease sooner.
Therefore
, people's lifetime is longer.
For example
, if someone finds out they have early-stage cancer, they will be treated early and sustain
life
. The focus on food choices
also
increased, people will know which foods are clean, what foods are healthy.
In addition
, the increase in
life
expectancy
will help many professionals, teachers, researcher or doctors
to devote
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devote
more to the country.
Secondly
, one thing to worry about that
life
expectancy
is increasing means the retiring age will later. Young people after graduated can not find a job because
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people are in
this
position with more experience. So that the government needs to spend much money to support young people and create more jobs to keep an unemployment rate not increase. But thanks to that, there will be many generations in a family living together. Descendants will live with grandparents, they will learn about many things related to history and tradition. In conclusion, the advantages of increased
life
expectancy
outweigh the disadvantages,
Life
is precious and the government should spend more money on medical care in any way possible. All of us want to live longer and contribute to our family and country for as long as possible.

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