A large company in your area has decided to spend amount of money,either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feed back general public. write a letter to the company .in your letter -describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team -summerise the benefits of paying for the concert. -say how you think to send the money

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Dear Sir, I hope
this
email finds you in good health. I am writing
this
letter to share my feedback about spending money either for a
sports
team
or an open-air concert in our area.
Firstly
, I would like to describe a
sports
team
which is formed by local children.
Although
this
team
has been organizing their
sports
-related instruments in their own way, it is really difficult for them at present to bear the daily expenses.
Therefore
, I would like to suggest sponsoring
this
team
for the next two years and
this
is because children will be motivated to be good
sports
person in the future.
Secondly
, there are not enough places for recreation in
this
area which is why sometimes people living in
this
area ask for an open-air concert, especially during the winter season.
However
,
this
concert arrangement will not only entertain the local people but
also
help them to be peaceful mentally.
Finally
, in my perspective, I would like to suggest investing the money in the
sports
team
as it will help the children to make their dream true for a long time. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Mike Tyson
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Task Achievement
To enhance task response, ensure you fully address all parts of the task. While your letter covers the required points, adding more detail about how sponsoring the sports team or paying for the concert could specifically benefit the community could make your response even stronger.
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