The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

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of mobile phone sales in the

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companies

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. The graph compares the 2005

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companies

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with the year 2006. In 2005, Nokia had 32.5% of the

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which increased by 2.5% by 2006.

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, Motorola followed the same trend and

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market

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rose from 17.7% to 21.1% by 2006.

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, there was a decrease from 12.7% to 11.8% in Samsung's

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by 2006.

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of 7% and lower displayed mixed results. Sony Ericsson's

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rose from 6.3% to 7.4%. At the same time, L.G's

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dropped from 6.7% to 6.3%

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, BenQ Mobile's

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dropped from 4.9% to 2.4%. Other

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dropped from 19.2% to 16.2% by 2006.

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The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

In some countries, there is not enough recycling of waste materials (e.g. paper, glass and cans). What are the reasons and solutions?

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that government should spend their money on elderly people's care. However, other people say that government should focus more on education for young people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.