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Rising university fees as a result students prefer practical degree courses. Agree or disagree?

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Graduates all over the world have started believing that there is a direct correlation between High-paying jobs and practical degree courses offered by universities. In my opinion,
such
 a presumption is inaccurate and I can cite numerous reasons to negate the same.
Firstly
, the suggestion that certain subjects must be restricted from teaching on the basis of theory and experiment seems implausible. Courses
be
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are
 it Science, Commerce and Humanities, all require in- depth knowledge.
For instance
, I did my under-graduation in Statistics.
Although
, the course was more numeric and analytical oriented I still had to do a detailed study of all the algorithms and theorems which were integral
for
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to
 my overall development as a statistician.
Moreover
, when a student sits for various company interviews, he or she is indebted to face a technical interview.
This
 interview is solely taken to ensure whether one knows the nuances of their subject or not.
Moreover
, firms these days have tie-ups with corporations
such
 as Coursera and LinkedIn that provides access to a pool of online resources so that the employees are at par with the developing world.
In
contrast some
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contrast, some
 individuals hold the view that teaching methodologies in most institutions are becoming obsolete. In spite of rising fees, there is a dearth of
updated
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updates
 technology and equipment’s in all colleges globally. Taking the case of University of Delhi, India, wherein all the academic professors are subject matter experts still the syllabus taught and the tools used are archaic.
As a result
, students prefer to take up a field of
study which
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study, which
 is pragmatic as compared to a factual one, in-order to avoid
such
 inefficiencies. In conclusion, I would like to suggest that all organisations world-wide must ensure that the modules taught are a well-balanced mix of applied as well as non-applied courses, thereby having an all-round growth of a learner.
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