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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times in most people’s life others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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People have different opinions about happiness and the happiest times in their
life
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. While many people believe they were very happy during their adolescence, others opine that adulthood was more enjoyable than their teenage years. In my opinion, the happiest times of
life
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 may vary from person to person. Each stage of
life
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 has its joys and sorrows. Many people remember their teenage years with utmost importance. There are several reasons for
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. Most people would have enjoyed a great sense of freedom during their college days or school days. As friendship and brotherhood are in their prime during those years, many would have experienced joyful moments.
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, college parties and sports events were great occasions to get together and have great fun.
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, teenagers have much fewer responsibilities than adults.
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, adulthood offers several positive and happy moments. Most of the adults fondly remember their cherished moments
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 as their
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 house or job, marriage day celebration,
birth
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the birth
 of their child and so on. As people age, they
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 evolve and develop qualities
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 as maturity and understanding. These factors can bring a sense of
fulfillment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
 and
stability which
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stability, which
 in turn contributes to long term happiness in many people’s lives. In conclusion, adulthood and teenage
life
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 have their share of ups and downs. While it is the lack of responsibilities that make
life
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 joyous during adolescence, it is the realization of one’s dreams and aspirations that make adult
life
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 more memorable. In my opinion, it is up to each individual to say / decide which period was the happiest
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with
 their
life
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.

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