Nowadays, there are more opportunities for women than there were in the past. Some people think this situation has cause more problems than it has solved. What are your opinions on this?

For a long time, there was a discrimination against women, they were considered useless in anything aside from housework.
However
, fortunately nowadays it has changed drastically. They now have many opportunities to study, work, travel, in short, they are free to do things according to their own will.
Nevertheless
, some people still believe that a great number of opportunities caused more problem than it has solved. From my point of view, that opinion is unreasonable and discriminating.
First
and foremost, in the past,
larger number
Suggestion
a larger number
of opportunities created a possibility for women to prove themselves worthy to the society of men, changing society to the equal one. In the past, women were married off against their will and had to do housework every day because they were considered weak and not intelligent. That has changed when women started to get
education
Suggestion
an education
,
thus
were
we are
we're
able to start work in the fields of science and education, which proved that they are intelligent and capable as much as men are.
Moreover
, society became more open-minded and acceptable
of
Suggestion
for
women. They now can choose what they want to do, decide for themselves whom to be with and so on. What is more, they dedicate themselves to the humanity,
for example
, caring and treating sick people, doing research in different fields of science and liberal arts, fighting for human rights and even serving for the country in the battlefield. Concluding that, I can say that there are problems, but they are more personal and cannot be caused by the escalating number of opportunities for women.
In contrast
, it is only beneficial to us.
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